Friday 16 June 2017

literacy reflection week 7

here is my mrs reissmann descriptive writing and we did this for literacy here is a picture of my work.

5 comments:

  1. Tena Koe STANLEY!!! IM ZAHEER
    I liked the way you did your writing maybe next time you could just make it colourful to make it look cool

    FROM ZAHEER NOHO ORA MAI

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  2. Hi Stanley,you have some interesting descriptive phrases in this piece of writing. I especially like how you have described Miss Reissmann's boots. Be careful not to include too many similes in one sentence. Next time it would be great to see you including some descriptive ideas about your characters personality as well as theri physical appearance to give us a more complete picture. Tino pai, Mrs P

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  3. Hi Stanley,you have some interesting descriptive phrases in this piece of writing. I especially like how you have described Miss Reissmann's clothing. Be careful not to include too many similes in one sentence. Next time it would be great to see you including some descriptive ideas about your characters personality as well as there physical appearance to give us a more complete picture. cool photo Lachlan

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